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Some people believe that all the company decisions should be taken by the managers whereas others think it is better to include employees while making decisions. Discuss both the points and give your opinion

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The idea of staff involvement in every company
decisions
Suggestion
decision
 is advocated by people because it improves the employee and employer relationship, and projects different angles on the decision table. With regards to the former, when the workers of an enterprise are asked to share their opinions and ideas before launching any new company policy, they feel valued and consider themselves as a significant contributor to the team.
As a result
, they raise their level of efforts and stay committed to the organization. It is
also
 believed that when more minds are involved in decision-making, more ideas are brought into the light, which would
otherwise
 have been overlooked.
However
, the above arguments can be rejected by considering the sense of individuality and confidentiality involved when employees are
also
 a part of the crucial decisions taken by the managers. As far as individual opinions are concerned, the company associates are
most likely
Suggestion
more likely
 to support the ideas for an individual benefit.
However
, the management has to be unbiased and set the policies which are for the benefit of the overall organization. In additions to
this
, it is
also
 difficult for the leaders to reach at any conclusion when there are tons of individual opinions. At the same time, there are some situations when confidential documents are taken under consideration while making decisions and disclosure of
such
 confidential information to employees is not a feasible option for the management.
Therefore
, security could be an issue when employees are
also
 involved in important decisions. In conclusion, even though the inclusion of workforce paves the way to a stronger employee and emplo
yer relationship
Accept comma addition
relationship, but
 but I believe that certain important decisions demand confidentiality and are better taken by the management
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • broader perspective
  • company's goals and strategy
  • informed decisions
  • align with the company's vision
  • boost morale
  • higher job satisfaction
  • productivity
  • experience and expertise
  • complex decisions
  • company's success
  • hands-on experience
  • insights
  • practical solutions
  • innovative ideas
  • extensive consultation
  • faster response times
  • competitive market
  • collaborative work culture
  • improve communication
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