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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam'. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars?

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Over the past years, a lot of people have their car very increased each year. So
this
 is the main point to have one big traffic
jam
. In my opinions, In my country have a lot of
car
Suggestion
cars
 that make traffic
jam
. Many people bought the ride because makes them
to
to a degree exceeding normal or proper limits
too
 comfortable to go to anywhere and do not wait the bus to go to or sky train to go
this
 the main point to make traffic
jam
. I think that government can measure to discourage people to provide day to give some people to drive,
for example
, that in day 1,2,3,.. People have number, address 1,2,3,.. To go out to drive. And government has to develop transportation that do not to have a transportation
jam
 and. Support people to use the bus or sky train to go to anywhere more than use their wagon.
Traffic
Suggestion
The traffic jam
A traffic jam
jam
 is a big problem for any country because having a lot of people to buy their wagon and do not use the public transports. Government have to edit and developed
this
 problem more.

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