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Nowadays, we can watch entertainment performance on the screen (laptops, tablets) and no need to watch it live. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#entertainment #performance #screen #laptops #tablets
Currently all
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Currently, all
 entertainment performance people can watch on TV (
screen
, laptops)
instead
 of
watching in a real
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watching a real
 life. I incompletely agree with
this
 statement and in
this
 essay
ilI
at or near the beginning of a period of time or course of events or before the usual or expected time
early
isle
 will present my own opinion. On the one
hand watching
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hand, watching
 entertainment programs on TV or on other gadgets can be convenient due to the several reasons. One of the reasons is that people can watch any kind of programs whenever they want and wherever they like. Another reason of
this
 is that people can save their money
,
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,
 because watching on the
screen
.
For instance
, when we are watching TV shows or programs on
screen
 we have a good quality of viewing which available for everyone,
moreover
 there good position as opposed
to watch
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to watching
 it live.
On the other hand
, watching any kinds of performance in a real life
,
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,
also
 may be
attractive
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attracted
. Because when people watching in live it can bring them unforgettable feelings and probably imprinted in memory for a long time.
For example
, watching a live concert of our
favorite
something regarded with special favor or liking
favourite
 music artist much better compare to watching on
screen
.
Accept space
.
 In conclusion entertainment performance may be
enjoyable
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enjoyed
 in real life as well as on the
screen
.

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