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It is important for travellers and business people to understand the cultures they come into contact with, however briefly. What are the main advantages of doing so? What do you think is the main disadvantage of not doing so?

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The understanding cultures
is
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are
 vital aspect for businessmen and businesswomen and number of visitors to get in touch with foreign people. It is
exact
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exactly
 that, knowing about cultures brings a lot of benefits for
business
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 people and their company.
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 of all, if people know the
country
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's language and culture
well which
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well, which
 they travel, they can make
good impression
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a good impression
 about their
country
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 and can communicate people without any difficulty.
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, they face to warm attitudes of
native people
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the native people
 and make friends easily in that
country
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.
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 main advantage for people to gain a lot of information about their host society. Knowing how to behave
theirselves
reflexive form of "them"
themselves
 can bring
business
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 people a vast of money for themselves and their companies.
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, when you the Asian temples, it is not permitted to wear short and
colorful
having striking color
colourful
 clothes because it is impolite for the saint.
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, misunderstanding other cultures and traditions bad image you and your
country
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. It is
also
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 can fail your
business
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 date. As an example, people would be consider it is an arrogant act if you fold your arms or put your hands inside the pocket while
talking other people
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talking to other people
talking with other people
. So, cultural characteristics are very necessary for those who want to travel or live abroad. In conclusion, these advantages and disadvantages will improve people's experience and knowledge
about about travelling
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about travelling
. Travellers and
ecpecially
to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common
especially
business
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 people should get more information about cultures and
country
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 before
journey
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the journey
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