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some people think it is better for childrento grow up in the city,while,other thinks that life in the countryside is more suitable for them. discuss both views.

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environment
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 makes a huge impact on the nourishment of juvenile. Masses envisage that offspring should bring up in the green areas
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As, green areas have better
amenties
things that make you comfortable and at ease
amenities
 of the child.
However
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others are in the favour of own country's
environment
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.Personally, I believe that children may have better
surrounding
the environmental condition
surroundings
 in the countryside. Here, I will shed light on my opinions in the upcoming paragraphs. To commence with
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pupil
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the pupil
a pupil
pupils
 may attach to the nature and feels good to protect the
environment
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 while, In the countrysides they only have smart phones or computers and worried about their securities.
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even though
offspring
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the offspring
 knows about the
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environment but
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environment, but
 did not
connected
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connect
 with the nature.Due to the, large buildings
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heavy vehicles
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large industries etc. These all things destroyed the beauty of the nature.
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consequently
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Consequently
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youngsters disconnected with the
environment
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on
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On
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metropolitian
relating to or characteristic of a metropolis
metropolitan
 towns provide more opportunities
of
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for
 the well-positioned job than countryside because of the development of towns in each and every
fields
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field
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in addition
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In the cities
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they attain
a
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an
 excellent value of the life.
which
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Which
 makes their life
more easier
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easier
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consequently
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Consequently
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children
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the children
 enjoyed more in urban areas. To sum up
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whether children should
brought
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bring
 up in urban or green areas have some pros and cons.
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the benefits of particular areas have some limitations.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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