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A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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As we see in today´s modern world, people tend to give more dignity to those who are prominent and wealthy despite the fact of their blackness in moral values or good behaviour.To my point of view I would be totally agreed to the above statement.Why they would get more attention publicly? In
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where everybody wants to earn a lot of money in regard to raise their social standard because they know the fact that the majority of the population would listen and honour those who have a big house
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nice car and carries expensive items.There is a big reason why that person is being treated well in society?
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 is among most of us has a thought of being secured as if they stick to that wealthy person. People
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 overlooked the bad traits of that particular personality.They wouldn't even think how would they have gathered that upper status in public.Due to
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 some criminals in our society are in politics or other businesses and gets the respect and power that they don't"t deserve. I think we should not practice
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 that could lead to the future generation which would eventually cause harm to our social environment To conclude,i would say we should respect the kindness of true person and should have kept our trust in them which would lead to a better socitey for us and for our future generation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social status
  • Material possessions
  • Old-fashioned values
  • Honour
  • Kindness
  • Trust
  • Judged
  • Importance
  • Traditional
  • Reflection
  • Achievements
  • Hard work
  • Disregarded
  • Well-balanced
  • Meaningful
  • Cultural norms
  • Societal norms
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