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Given is a graph demonstrating consumer goods in British homes for a period between 1972 and 1983. Overall, massive increases were seen in categories
such
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 as central heating, refrigerator and phoning equipment while marginal ones were experienced by remaining items. In 1972, almost each household in Britain owned a TV set and a vacuum cleaner.
In
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During
this
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 period, about two-thirds had a washing machine and fridge.
In
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During
 the following
year
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, every one of the durables saw an increase of at least 2 and 8% at most, the latter growth coming in terms of telephone which
totaled
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 50 %. Nearly the same pattern continued in the subsequent years, and 1979 was the
year
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 when some significant upward trends took place. Namely, telephone, once again, obtained 7 % growth in
popularity whereas
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popularity, whereas
 TV, dust cleaner and fridge were still common items standing at over 90 %. Other items were present at least in every
second
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 house. Interesting to note is the fact that dishwashers, which came into existence a
year
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 earlier, remained in three out of a hundred homes in Britain. The following annum saw only a negligible increase in all areas before all categories topped out in the final
year
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 (1983).
Then
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, at least 60 % of families possessed basic home equipment with the box being the most ubiquitous at 98 percent. In the same
year
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,
video
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the video
 came into being with almost a fifth of all households enjoying it.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Personal fulfillment
  • Unfulfilling job
  • Mental health
  • Physical health
  • Financial stability
  • Job security
  • Societal norms
  • Career choices
  • Pursuing passion
  • Practicality
  • Personal growth
  • Skill development
  • Self-esteem
  • Social status
  • Work-life balance
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