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The chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevan

The chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevan
#information #sites #people #canada #summarise #features #comparisons #relevan
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The bar chart gives information about the percentage of multiple social network
sites
what
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used by
canadians
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Canadians
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in
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between 2014 and 2015.
Overall
, most people used one
sites
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site
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 in both years. if we
goes
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 to the five
sites
 we can clearly see
gradual
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a gradual
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 decline
to
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in
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percentage
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the percentage
a percentage
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 of
users
.
furthermore
 number of
one site
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one-site
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users
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failed
filled
falled
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fell
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,
however
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 the number
users
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of users
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used
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who used
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 multiple
sites
is
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rose
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in
ine
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in
 the year
On the other
hand
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 the percentage of people to
no
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not
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 used any site got down to 21% from 22% in a year,
however
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,however
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 the single site
users
experinced
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experienced
experience
 to
downward
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a downward
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 trend and they downed to 28% from 36%. inversely
number
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a number
the number
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 of multiple
sites
users
 indicated an upward trend
for instance
 two
sites
users
 rose from 23% to 24%, three
sites
users
incrase
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increase
increased
 to 16% from 12% with
similar
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a similar
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 incline, four
sites
users
 with 3% increase to 8% from 5% and five
sites
users
 rose to 4% from 2% with double the increase.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sites, users with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "gives" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "goes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "goes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Comparative data
  • Utilization
  • Consecutive years
  • Overall trends
  • Proportion
  • Notable changes
  • Consistencies
  • Diversification
  • Summarize
  • Reflecting
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