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The plans below show the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

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 we are witnessing a significant advancement being made in the field of agriculture, numerous people are still deprived of basic needs like food. In my opinion, the main reason for
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 issue due to the
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 and the
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.
This
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 essay will present the solution to be done
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 problem. On the one hand, the
war
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 still occurs in some countries that causes people to suffer from starvation for not being provided food which the world's agriculture is increasing.
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, the
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 prevents residents producing local food and difficulty in importing products, which makes people's life more difficult, fearful and even die of famine.
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,
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 is
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 a cause for concern in some countries today.
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, the
inflation
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 of Venezuela makes the currency devaluation, so that amount's salary can only buy a kilogram of meat.
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, the United Nations should prevent the conflicts in some countries because when there are not any
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, the government can improve the economy and import the foods to provide the people's needs.
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, the rate of famine in those countries will be declined and the life quality improves
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 improved a lot.
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, the official should provide the anti-inflationary policies and the job opportunities for the citizens which help them get out of hunger and life becomes more stable. To sum up, the figure of the figure of the hungers will be reduced in the developing industrial world if the
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 and conflict are abolished in some nation by some presented solutions in
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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