The two pie charts below show the percentages of industry sectors’ contribution to the economy of Turkey in 2000 and 2016. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two pie charts below show the percentages of industry sectors’ contribution to the economy of Turkey in 2000 and 2016.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
There are charts
provide
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information about the percentages of
sectors
contributed
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that contributed
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to the
economy
of Turkey for two periods, in 2000 and 2016.
Overall
, in the
first
period
, agriculture was the most significant
sector
contributed
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that contributed
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to the
economy
of Turkey,
while
the construction
sector
was the smallest
sector
contributed. In comparison, in the
second
period
, healthcare and education became the largest
economy
segment
to
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of
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the
economy
, and the lowest
contribution
was finance, business, and others. There are four
sectors
in which the
contribution
increased.
First
, in 2000, the construction
sector
contributes
3
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to 3
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% of the
economy
and boost up more than three times to 10% in 2016.
Second
,
an
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the
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income from the manufacturing
sector
in 2000 was 8% and in 2016 it increased
half
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by half
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of the percentage to 12%.
Then
, a
contribution
from trade, utilities, and transportation
sectors
; and finance, business and other was 16% and 5% respectively and each of them slightly increased to 16% and 8%. The rest of the
sectors
are decreased and steady. The
sector
of agriculture which in the
first
period
gave an income
almost
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of almost
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a quarter of the
economy
fell to 14% in 2016.
Then
, in the
first
period
,
a
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the
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government
sector
contribution
decreased from 12% to 9% after it. After that, the leisure and hospitality
sectors
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sectors'
sector's
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contribution
was
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slightly decreased from 17% to 14%. And
the
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apply
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last
, there is no difference
contribution
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in contribution
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from healthcare and education in 2000 and 2016.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "second".
Vocabulary: Replace the words sectors, economy, first, period, sector, contribution with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Contribution
  • Percentage
  • Sector
  • Economy
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Stability
  • Significant
  • Notable
  • Trend
  • Period
  • Agriculture
  • Industry
  • Construction
  • Healthcare
  • Education
  • Trade
  • Utilities
  • Transportation
  • Finance
  • Business services
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