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The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries

The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries
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The provided
line
 graph and table
delienate
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delineate
 regarding
universal
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 quantity of
water
 utilization in three various categories from
20th
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the 20th
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 century to the
next
 subsequent hundred-year and compares
water
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the water
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 expenditure number of 2 dissimilar regions namely-
Brazil
 and
Congo
 in two
milleniums
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millenniums
.
According to
 the
line
 chart,comprehensive
water
 use by fields were reported with growing remarkably in these periods
while
bar
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the bar
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 graph reveals that there was
a
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dominant
distinctions
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 between
two
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the two
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 areas in term of using
water
 disbursement. When it comes to international
water
 use by divisions, the culminated point was started at relatively
500km3
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500 km3
.Correspondingly to the
line
 chart,the rural economy was observed with climbed significantly
over
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 1990 to
the
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2000 to approximately 3.000km3.
In contrast
,the bottommost point was a section of
domestinf
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domestic
 usage
was
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that was
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 launched from 0km3 sam as
Industrial
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the Industrial
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 sector.The
line
 of domestic use was recorded
wih
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with
negligible
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 upward trend and
intersection
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the intersection
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 with mechanical utilization was
seperated
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separated
 in
the
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roughly 1940. Now turning to the
water
 consumption in
Brazil
 and
Congo
 in 2000.It can be clearly seen that
,
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Brazil
's indicators were
highly
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 demand in the three outlays.In
Republic
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the Republic
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 of
Congo
,
community's
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the community's
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 payment was 5.2 million which is nearly 30 times less than
Brazil
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in Brazil
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.
Obviously
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 to see that,there is
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an immersely
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immersely
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immensely
 interval
amonh
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among
 irrigated land,
Brazil
 was 26.500km2 more than about 265 times
Congo
(100km2).Moving to the
last
 consumption was
water
 using each individual.In
Brazil
 it was 359m3 per person,
conversely
,
Congo
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in Congo
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 was 8
metr
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meters
 cube.
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