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Increasing numbers of students are choosing to study abroad. To what extent does this trend benefit the students themselves and the countries involved? What are the drawbacks?

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Studying abroad has become increasingly common in the
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 few years, especially for young people from countries
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 as China and India. Many students and their families clearly consider the experience worth the sacrifices involved. The former
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 up friendships when they move abroad; the latter
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 their life savings.
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, many governments are willing to invest huge sums of money in sponsoring their young people to study in universities overseas.
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,
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 trend has drawbacks as well as benefits for those concerned. One potential drawback is that the instruction international students receive may not be relevant to their
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, students from developing countries who go to Western countries for teacher training are often taught to use teaching techniques that are suitable for small classes. When they return
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home they
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home, they
 are often expected to teach classes of 40 or 50 students.
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, what they have been trained to do may not be relevant. Another potential drawback is the phenomenon of 'brain drain'. Prior to leaving
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, they may be fully committed to returning.
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, students are often at the stage in their lives when they are forming their most important personal and professional relationships.
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 may choose to remain in the host country on completing their studies.
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, most international students find ways of making the experience work well for themselves and others involved. Most return
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, enriched by new friendships made abroad.
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, most find ways of adapting what they have learned
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