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The bar chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruit and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruit and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008.
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The bar chart illustrates what
percentage
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 of people divided into 3 categories (children,
women
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 and
men
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) in the UK ate
five
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portions
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 of fruit and vegetables a
day
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 over eight years from 2001 to 2008.
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, the highest
percentage
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 of
women
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 ate
five
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portions
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 per
day
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 over the entire period. The year 2006 had the maximum number of
women
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 and
men
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eat
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five
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portions
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 a
day
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.
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 2007 had the highest number of children eating
five
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portions
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, in terms of
men
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 it had the same
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 as that of 2006.
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, 2001 was the year with the lowest percentages of people eating
five
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portions
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 a
day
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. The
percentage
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 of
women
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 who ate fruit and vegetable
five
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 times a
day
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 started
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at
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 just over 20% in 2001. The
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then
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 rose steadily to around 35% in 2006, after which the numbers slipped to 30% by 2008. With regards to children and
men
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, the
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 were stable for the first three years with 10% and 15% respectively. From
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point
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 the
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 began to increase gradually to around 28% and 25%
respecively
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respectively
 by 2007.
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, there was a marginal decrease in the
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 by the end of the period with around
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a 2
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% fall in each of the categories.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, women, men, five, portions, day, figures with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Trend analysis
  • Significant fluctuation
  • Dietary habits
  • Public health campaign
  • Demographic breakdown
  • Socio-economic status
  • Predictive suggestions
  • Consumption rates
  • Dietary guidelines
  • Technological advancements
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