The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007.   Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph provides information about the
number
of
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graduate students in Canada between 1992 and 2007.
overall
both females and males experienced an upward pattern.but both had some fluctuations throughout the
period
.
Although
female
graduates
were higher in
number
during
this
period
.
Initially
, the
number
of
graduates
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female graduates
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of females was nearly
about
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100000 in 1992 and it rose approximately by 5000 during the next three years. Even though there was a gradual decrease in the
number
of female
graduates
between 1995 and 1998.
However
, it continued to increase steadily to the end of the
period
and
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the highest
number
of
graduates
nearly
about
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150000 in 2007. It was almost 60000 more than, the
number
of male students
graduated
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who graduated
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in the same year. The
number
of male
graduates
was about 70000 in 1992 and it showed the same pattern as female students until 1995. After that, there was a dramatic decrease in the next four years. even though the
number
of males increased to almost above 90000
to
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the end of the
period
. But showed some fluctuations from 1998 to 2001.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, period, graduates with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 7 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • general trend
  • fluctuations
  • peaks
  • dips
  • significant differences
  • increase/decrease
  • comparison
  • data
  • period
  • economic conditions
  • policy changes
  • cultural shifts
  • implications
  • workforce
  • economy
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