The graph shows the percentage of UK adolescents following a vegetarian diet.

The line chart illustrates the rate of UK juveniles who have vegetarian diets between 1960 to 2020. As

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is observed from the graph, less than 1 per cent of teenagers were vegetarian in 1960.

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proportion

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steeply increased to more than 15% by 1980.

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year the

proportion

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of youth

vegetarian

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vegetarians

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was the highest. Over the

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10 years, the percentage of adolescent

vegetarian

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vegetarians

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decreased steadily. From 1990

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2000 the

proportion

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fluctuated and touched the lowest point in

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period with just 4 per cent. It is seen from the data, after the year 2000,

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proportion

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the proportion

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of young

vegetarian

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vegetarians

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again enhanced gradually and it is estimated that

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will remain almost constant in the

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decade.

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, it is shown that vegetarianism among teenagers in the UK

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has risen

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risen

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rose

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dramatically

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since

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1960 and was very popular in 1980.

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the number of young vegetarians dropped and it is predicted that it will go up in the future

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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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Complete response

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159 words

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The graph shows the percentage of UK adolescents following a vegetarian diet.

Both government investment in public transport systems and reductions in public transport ticket prices will help to reduce transport pollution greatly. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

decison shold be taken by leader or by employees both views

More and more people are using computers and electric devices to access information; therefore, there is no need for printed books, magazines, and newspapers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Are higher taxes or lower taxes better for society? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.