The graph shows the percentage of UK adolescents following a vegetarian diet.

The line chart illustrates the rate of UK juveniles who have vegetarian diets between 1960 to 2020. As

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is observed from the graph, less than 1 per cent of teenagers were vegetarian in 1960.

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proportion

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steeply increased to more than 15% by 1980.

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year the

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of youth

vegetarian

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vegetarians

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was the highest. Over the

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10 years, the percentage of adolescent

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vegetarians

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decreased steadily. From 1990

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2000 the

proportion

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fluctuated and touched the lowest point in

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period with just 4 per cent. It is seen from the data, after the year 2000,

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proportion

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the proportion

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of young

vegetarian

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vegetarians

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again enhanced gradually and it is estimated that

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will remain almost constant in the

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decade.

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, it is shown that vegetarianism among teenagers in the UK

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has risen

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risen

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rose

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dramatically

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since

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1960 and was very popular in 1980.

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the number of young vegetarians dropped and it is predicted that it will go up in the future

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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

159 words

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not eat meat
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health
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environment
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