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People’s shopping habits depend more on the age group they belong to than any other factors

#people’s #habits #age #group #factors
In
this
 era
,
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,
people have always been seeking basic
necessity but
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necessity, but
 nowadays purchasing certain products has become popular in their daily life.
However many
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However, many
 of us believe that it depends with
age
factors
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factors, although
although
 there are
also
 some factors which
is really required
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are really required
. I disagree with
this
 statement.
To begin
 with, there is no doubt that some
age
 people have same interests in purchasing products as well as their mutual hobbies. The little aged children are always looking for toys
where as
on the other hand
whereas
 teenagers are commonly fascinated with gadgets on which they can download video games, movies and so on.
Therefore there
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Therefore, there
 shopping habits are examined on their
age
group but
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group, but
 yet there is still questionable that
age
 groups matter the most or not
On the other hand
, the social
economic
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economy
also
 matter when they are purchasing products. Upper class of society has been buying brand clothes whereas middle class and lower class of people are every time purchasing products which
is
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are
 available at cheaper cost. Gender
also
 effect because the young male and female will not play similar toys as the other. Usually boys are playing with cars and model of
superhero
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the superhero
 whereas girls are playing with
doll
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dolls
a doll
the doll
 and plastic cooking appliances. To conclude that categorising customers based on their
age
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are
 an effective
way but
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way, but
 there are allot of factors which is
also
 important.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • shopping habits
  • age group
  • generational differences
  • individual preferences
  • interests
  • socioeconomic factors
  • cultural influences
  • marketing strategies
  • advertising
  • online shopping
  • technology
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