Some people believe that unpaid community service should be compulsory part of high school programs for example, working for charity, improving neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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More and more country thinks that
education
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of high
school
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should be compulsory for the all world. In the
last
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hundered
being ten more than ninety
hundred
years
education
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have made
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has made
monumental advances in many fields.
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, those who have
education
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throughout high
school
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learn lots of beneficial morals. From my point of view I think,
costless
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public service must be added in the curriculum of high
school
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instead
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of some lessons.
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with, according to the great number of reports, there are many people who need basic life e equipments
becouse
for the reason that; on account of
because
of
poor
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the poor
. As there are
inequalitites
lack of equality
inequalities
in wealth distribution in many
country
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countries
more and more people should help many aspects. If unpaid community service is
tought
impart skills or knowledge to
taught
thought
tight
during high
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school
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school, thus
thus
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students can be sensitive or
litelare
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aspect of
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stuation
the general state of things; the combination of circumstances at a given time
situation
.
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, students will face some trouble circumstance which some poor or sick people suffer in their country.
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, teaching sports are vital for not only for
teenager but
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teenager, but
also
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the other people.
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, if children expose to sports at
school
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they will be more healthy and keep
their
objective case of they
them
fit.
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, as making physical activities makes human life quality.
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, schools must be exposed to some sports for children's health. In the light of
this
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information above, it can be clearly said that, some programs could be beneficial
for
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to
students' health, morals and lessons. Due to the fact that, some lesson or service
such
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as teaching sports, working for charity should be attached at
education
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programmes of high
school
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.
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