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The bar chart gives information about the number of car journeys into the city centre made by residents and non-residents. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart gives information about the number of car journeys into the city centre made by residents and non-residents. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
 graph shows how many residents and non-residents
had
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made a journey
since
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 1996 until 2005. In general, in 1996 there were more residents that made a car journey. But, after the introduction of parking meters, there were more non-local citizen
travelers
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.
Initially
,
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10000 residents
 went into the city centre.
Although
 in 2000 they dropped
at
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 around 5000 people, because of
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the introductionof
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introductionof
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introduction of
 parking meters into
city
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the city
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 centre. The lowest
averaged
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 was reached in 2004
totaling
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 around 4000 for the closing to
traffic
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the traffic
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 of Westgate Street and Park Lane in 2002. Non-residents,
instead
, were in 1996 nearly 5000. Afterwards, the average boosts
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 roughly 8000 in 2000 and it remained steady until 2002. The cause of
this
 decline was the insertion of parking meters into
city
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 centre in 1999. In 2003 the sum of non-residents reduced
of
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 5000 people for the same problem of inhabitants with traffic. In 2005 the quantity of non-local citizens raised up
of
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 5000
persons
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people
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.

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