Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give you opinion.

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Nowadays, playing a good role in
society
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is an essential and hard progress. Many say that children should be taught by their parents about how to become a good part of
society
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. Though, other people, including myself, believe that school is the best place of teaching of being a good individual in
society
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.
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, parents have a huge and important role in
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process. They have to pay attention to their children's behaviour, because behaviour is an extremely essential part of being friendly.
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, everyday children's smartphones should be checked by the parents to know what their children are doing. As well as, parents have to reduce the amount of time w
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time, which
sting by video games, TV and Internet.
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, parents need to allow their children to play outside together with friends. Another option is organising family gatherings where children can be closer to his or hor re
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ives. Because everything starts from family
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the family
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, school
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the school
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takes part in
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process. Because, the
first
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society
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which children face is their classmates, teachers and scholl
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an educational institution
school
schools
scholars
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. So,
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the family
if they learn to be a good person in
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kind of small
society
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, they will not be distracted during their upcoming lifetime.
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, team-working facilities in classes are really high. In there, children test different characters and
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they know how to communicate with variet
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a variety
ople. It is
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beneficial for their future job.
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, studying subjects is
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necessary for a sociable person. As I myself practiced, reading books much can automatically improve social skills of an individual. In conclusion,
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hard progress, by all means, contains school atmosphere,
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, parent's attention can be
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the second thing
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ecoming friendly or sociable.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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