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As countries have developed there has been a trend towards smaller family sizes. Why does this happen? How does this affect society?

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Nowadays, many countries in the world
is becoming
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are becoming
 developed and they
seeing
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are seeing
reduction
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a reduction
 in the size of
family
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the family
. There are some reasons why
smaller size family have gained
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the smaller size family, has gained
smaller size family has gained
the smaller size family has gained
the smaller size family have gained
popular
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popularity
 in developed countries. In
this
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 day and age,
government
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the government
 doesn't invest an enormous amount of money to each family in order to support
theirs
of them or themselves
their
 family.
For example
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, parents raise up their children is costly. Parents need to bring children go to a good school
,
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,
 providing a good life for them etc. In
this
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 case
,
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,
if
government
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the government
 doesn't give
some
one or some or every or all without specification
any
 money of each family
,
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,
 some poor family will
hard
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harden
 to support their family.
This
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 trend
,
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,
 affect community in many ways. One negative impact is the country will
no
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know
 enough young people in the workforce in the future.One of the positive impact is parents can provide their children have a better living environment or education.Beside that
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 people have more employment opportunities which they have
perpose
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a purpose
purpose
proposed
. In conclusion
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due to the perfect social higher cost of raising up children
,
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,
people prefer to have
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a
 smaller family size and it has a positive and negative impact.
This
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 trend will become
more popularity
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more popular
 in developed countries.
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