The table shows the proportions of income spent on 4 common items in the UK in 1998.

The table shows the proportions of income spent on 4 common items in the UK in 1998.
The table below depicts information regarding the percentage of income spent across 4 common items (food, electronic equipment, music,
videos
) in the UK by
adults
and
children
in 1998.
Overall
,
While
adults
spent most of their income on food,
children
preferred music.
Videos
were one of the least spent on items for both
adults
and
children
. Focusing on
adults
, about 23% of their income was spent on food, with women accounting for most of
this
at 39% and men only 14%.
In contrast
, electronic equipment was purchased more by men than women (10% and 1% respectively).
Videos
were the least popular category among
adults
with only 1% of the money earned spent on it.
On the other hand
,
children
utilised a major proportion of their money on music with boys and girls spending almost the same.
Similarly
,
although
videos
were not the most popular item on the list both boys and girls spent almost the same on them with 18% and 17% respectively. The item with the biggest disparity among the young was electronic equipment, with boys spending 18% of their expenses on it compared to girls who only spent 5%.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words videos, adults, children with synonyms.
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