Nowadays some professions such as doctors, lawyers and engineers are paid much higher than ordinary workers. What do you think of this trend? Are there any jobs which you think should offer high salaries?

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It is highly debatable issue that today only few occupations like physicians, legal advisors and engineers get high salaries as compared to other employees. I agree with the statement that the other professions
also
should be paid enough, the reason will be discussed in the following paragraphs. To commence with the reason why doctors, engineers and lawyer should get more wages; because they put
alot
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a lot
of efforts, money and time
to achieve
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achieve
their goals. To be more specific, the intensive study of subjects like Biology, physics, chemistry, economics and so on, need much time to learn. Beside
this
, the expenses of
this
course
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are
quite high, in
lakhs
an accidental hole that allows something (fluid or light etc.) to enter or escape
leaks
and required more and
more practice
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more practical
to be an expert.
For instance
, to be a specialist one
have
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has
to do MBBS and
then
MD which has
duration
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a duration
of 4 and 3 years respectively.
Also
, one should have to do practice along with their study.
Thus they
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Thus, they
deserve a high intensive for their dedication.
On the other hand
, there are not only some particular occupation who to be worthy of
salary but
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salary, but
also
many more well-deserved professions. Which are highly demanded in our country.
For example
,
soldier scientist
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soldier, scientist
and police officers, equally dedicated
with
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to
their duties. They
also
do their duties unconditionally. The duties of border security forces are too tough to do. They would have to work in extreme harsh conditions like 50 degree Celsius to -50 degree Celsius. Working hours for security officers are too long and live far away from the family. They are
also
very diligent and should be awarded for their devotion in the form of salary. To conclude, fair wages should be given to every
employee accordance with
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employee in accordance with
their job and qualification and should be give motivation for their work, so that hey give their best in
future
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the future
.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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