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Some people think that it would be better for large companies and industry to move to regional areas outside large urban area centers. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Many individuals hold the opinion that it would be better for large companies to have their base far from the city centre.
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 essay will discuss that the advantages, like better operational ability and uninterrupted
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 does clearly outweigh the disadvantages, like no strong contact with the city centre and difficulty accessing needed help. Any large company or organisation needs a smooth operation base for carrying out their
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 effectively. There are multiple tasks on a daily basis that need to be accomplished with efficiency, as any delay can impact the profits. An effective
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 relies primarily on a highly optimised
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while
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 carrying out everyday tasks.
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 leads to smoothly accomplishing any given
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 in a dedicated timeline, which allows one to take on more
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 and earn more money.
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, many billion-dollar companies focus on improving their
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 as it is the core element
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 which can skyrocket their business. There are
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 some downsides, like being completely isolated from the core of the city and not receiving the needed help in time. Any massive chain of operations requires space, and being far off can highly benefit the business when dealing with various tasks.
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 can be helpful for successfully doing the job, it can lead to operating from a secluded area.
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 can lead to not receiving the necessary assistance in case of any serious emergency.
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, in case of emergencies like a fire breakout or a gas leak, the firefighters or ambulance are not able to reach on time.
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, despite the drawbacks like being far off from the core, and not getting the desired help on time, I do believe that the upsides like having a better operational base, and being able to do
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 without any disturbance do clearly outweigh the cons.

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Add more proof. Give 2 or 3 strong facts or examples that fit your point.
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Show both sides. Acknowledge the good and bad, then tell your view at the end.
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Use simple link words to guide the reader, like 'also','because','but','however'.
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Break long ideas to small parts. One idea per line helps.
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Keep your view clear. Rest on your main point and end with a clear call.
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Clear view is in the last line.
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Some strong ideas about how work flow can help a firm.
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The essay uses examples to show a point.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Balanced regional development
  • Overconcentration
  • Housing affordability
  • Traffic congestion
  • Economic growth
  • Infrastructure
  • Environmental benefits
  • Skilled labor
  • Logistics
  • Operational efficiency
  • Urban sprawl
  • Ecosystems
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