The use of social media is replacing face-to-face interaction among many people in society. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Direct communication in the present is being replaced by online chats with the social networking apps like Facebook, Zalo or Instagram. In my opinion, technologies bring to our live many
benefit
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benefits
, the disadvantage will justify. On the one hand, social networking sites have made it easier for us to keep in touch with our loved person.
For example
, when people study abroad can keep in touch with their family and friends daily by using Zalo, Facebook or other video calling apps. Beside,
social network
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a social network
is
also
a
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an
effective tool in business and marketing, in the modern
technology
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technological
century, companies can update customers about new products or promotions by posting their campaigns or sponsor on Facebook or Instagram, it would save a significant amount of money and not time-consuming. That way will help reach more buyers because of the popularity of social networks.
On the other hand
, there are a huge of benefits I still believed that the social media is more harmful than beneficial.
To begin
with, the interpersonal communication or socializing is reduced by
the common
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the commonality
the commonness
the commonest
of social networks, so a significant number of residents who addict to the networking site, will constantly sit in front of the computer screen without paying attention to the surrounding people.
For instance
, there are a large number of health
problem
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problems
that the youth cause like obesity, myopia due to the network media.
Moreover
, the networks
also
affect on the way that people communicate and writing skill, due to they have tended to use symbols, emotions and abbreviations. To sum up,
although
social network made the
people
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person's
peoples'
life more convenient, in my point of view, the disadvantage of
this
issue
outweigh
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outweighs
of benefit.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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