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The following table graph represents the information about sales of drinks in small café for four months (January-April).

The following table graph represents the information about sales of drinks in small café for four months (January-April).
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The following table graph represents
the
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information about sales of
drinks
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 in small café for four months (January-April).
Overall
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, what stands out from
this
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 given graph is that there were the highest indexes in tea and coffee sales during the first three months of year 250, 270,
220
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and 220
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 respectively, but from
the
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April
this
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 data fell
at
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 180. It is interesting to note that the followers of cocktails were the lowest index in
following
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 period and fluctuated around 90-110. Another striking trend is that the data of juice lovers were two times higher than cocktails’, and fluctuated between 200, 190,
210
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 respectively.
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, the index of
ice
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drinks
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 was 150
in
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 the beginning of
given
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 period, namely January
as well as
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 February.
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, in
following
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 two months there was rapid growth and reach the point
at
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 190 in March and 230 in April.
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, after analyzing the given table graph
in
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 can be clearly seen that, Juices and Cocktails are not
effected
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affected
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 by seasonal demand.
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the
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Hot
drinks
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 and Ice
drinks
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 are always
effected
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affected
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 by seasonal demand.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words drinks with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "represents" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • increased
  • recorded
  • significant increase
  • lowest
  • compared to
  • positive growth
  • successful
  • attracting
  • evaluate
  • boost
  • attributed to
  • seasonal factors
  • promotional activities
  • maintaining
  • introducing
  • improving
  • preferences
  • cater to
  • effectively
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