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Reduce global environment damage should be handle by government rather than people . To what intent do you agree or disagree .

#environment #damage #government #people #intent
Due to human actions
,
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,
the damage to the
environment
 has increased rapidly
.
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.
 Even though
government
take
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takes
 many steps and efforts all over the world
,
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,
individual
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the individual
also have
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also has
major role
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a major role
 to play in reducing global
environment
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environmental
 hazards
.
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.
Hereby
,
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,
I strongly argue with
this
 notion.
To begin
 with
,
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,
one of the major
reason
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reasons
 for the pollution of the
environment
 is the uncontrolled
use
 of vehicles.Therefor
,
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,
if
individual
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an individual
individuals
the individual
 can make a right
hove
have or possess, either in a concrete or an abstract sense
have
how
 to change their
lifestyle
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lifestyle, such
such
 as by using public transport
.
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.
Individual
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An individual
The individual
 could play a significant role towards making
environment
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the environment
safer but
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safer, but
 not using enormous amount of
plastic
 is daily life
,
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,
which is hazardous pollutants of soil.
For
example almost
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example, almost
 all the consumer uses
plastic
 while shopping and they
use
 and throw things which cause soil pollution.
Government
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The government
 could certainly make efforts to encourage the
use
 of public transport.
This
 means
government
 run the transport facilities well and people must be able to afford them.
Also
government
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the government
 could introduce laws to limit the
use
 of
plastic
.
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.
Last
 but not least
government
make
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makes
 some rules
such
 as
plantey
the act of fixing firmly in place
planting
plantain
plenty
 over using
plastic
. In conclusion
,
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,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
 that people must play their part in looking after
environment
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the environment
.
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.
Nevertheless
 ,
government
 is equally responsible to manage the ecological issues
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