Improvements in health, education and trade are essential for the development of poorer nations. However, the governments of richer nations should take more responsibility for helping the poorer nations in such areas. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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in
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modern technology
still
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some
countries
are struggling for minimum essentials like food, health and education.
Whereas
some
countries
in
this
world are overloaded with wealth and development can help these undeveloped nations in terms of basic necessities. I agree with the statement that governments of developed
countries
should have responsibility
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developing the poorer
countries
. Even in
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the 21st
century, it is
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that there are people in many
countries
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not
having
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proper
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facilities to survive. The governments of these nations are unable to facilitate their people with daily needs because of their
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financial situations.
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of
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the
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counties
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in Africa people are dying because
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food and
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able to have proper health facilities. But,
countries
which are high in financial growth can help (or)
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these
countries
to
develop
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by helping in terms of cultivating lands with
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technologies, building hospitals and
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providing good education to the younger generation.
On the other hand
, for any
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their economic growth will improve by importing and exporting of goods. As per the INCO terms of global trading business for doing any import and export business there are so many conditions and taxes
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to be paid. So, to develop the economic growth of backward
countries
rich
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to support by exempting the taxes and
also
by establishing manufacturing industries in these places.
Finally
, in my opinion, to develop poor
countries
the governments of developed nations
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to come forward and support
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the basic essentials to live
human
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life.
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this
earth
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it is each and every individual responsibility to help each other and to remember we all
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to
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family of humanity.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • underdeveloped nations
  • economic disparity
  • global cooperation
  • moral obligation
  • historical exploitation
  • interconnected world
  • economic stability
  • quality of life
  • trade relationships
  • humanitarian aid
  • capacity building
  • dependency syndrome
  • sustainable development
  • bilateral agreements
  • economic priorities
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