The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.

The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.
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The bar chart illustrates
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information about the proportion of
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and
injuries
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per 100 million passenger miles travelled by transportation type in 2002.
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, it can be seen that
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most
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and
injuries
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came about on demand-response transports.
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, commuter
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services
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recorded by far the lowest statistics. In 2002, the number of 225
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incidents
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and 173
injuries
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mills travelled, came about on demand-response transport
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. In the same way, these statistics were approximately
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as high as those for the
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category, bus
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. There were 76
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and 66 people were injured on buses.
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total of
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on light
rail
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trains stayed the same recorded for buses, but there were moderately fewer
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, at only 39. Heavy
rail
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services
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numbers of
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event
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than light
rail
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services
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, but commuter
rail
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passengers were even less likely to experience problems. In total,
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only 20
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and 17
injuries
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occurred on commuter trains.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words incidents, injuries, rail, services with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • household expenditures
  • proportion
  • cultural differences
  • economic differences
  • living standards
  • real estate market
  • public transportation
  • private transportation
  • infrastructure
  • government healthcare policies
  • quality of life
  • holistic view
  • inflation
  • economic growth
  • societal norms
  • globalization
  • communication expenses
  • education expenses
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