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compare and contrast life in the countryside and that in urban areas

#contrast #life #countryside #areas
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These days, a majority of people prefer living in the
city
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 to living in the
country
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.
This
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 is a trend
that is
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 becoming more popular in many countries around the world.
Although
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 there are several similarities between
city
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life
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 and
country
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life
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, there are
also
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 some very important differences so that
life
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 in the
countryside
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 and that in urban areas have
differentiation
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different
differing
 obviously. Living under the same
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country but
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country, but
 of different regions, rural and urban,
besides
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 sharing several things in common, often vary greatly in cost of living. Both the
city
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 and the
countryside
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 have the same education and medical care.
However
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, in
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city
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the city
, they have many modern and well-equipped hospitals, which lead to a higher price of medical care to pay for those better services.
In contrast
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, the expense that people in rural area have to pay for medical care is a lot cheaper due to its backward facilities. The same situation happens
for
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in
to
education cost category
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the education cost category
. The amount of money that a
city
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 parent needs to invest in their children’s education can be fifth times as huge as that of their
country
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 counterparts.
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, lifestyle of the two places are not always the same.
Firstly
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, the technology of the urban is similar to the technology of the
city
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. People who live in the two areas might have and use many different kinds of technology.
However
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, people who live in the
city
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 can have more opportunities to access to new technologies than people who live in the
countryside
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.
Secondly
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, while people tend to leave
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countryside
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the countryside
 due to its decrease in jobs,
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city
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the city
 is climbing in the quantity of people moving to it so as to seek better employment.
However
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, in
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country
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the country
countries
, the main
career
someone whose employment involves carrying something
carrier
 is still farming. There are fewer choices for them to decide their employment. In conclusion,
although
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city
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life
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 and
countryside
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life
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 have similar
fearture
a prominent attribute or aspect of something
features
, they have many differences
such
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life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
, cost of living so that all people can differentiate between
life
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 in the
countryside
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 and that in urban areas obviously. Each region has its own unique advantages and drawbacks, but the most important thing is that everyone can choose where they live based on each person’s interest and character.
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