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Should Hong Kong adopt the opt-out system for organ donation? Write a letter to the editor addressing this issue.

I am writing to address the importance of adopting the opt-out
system
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 in Hong Kong. Reading the news of the 24-year-old woman who passed away after the successful lung transplant, I believe it is necessary for those patients who are awaiting
the
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organ
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 donors. Disputed by many people, the scheme is always rejected by the unwise traditional thought of keeping the whole corpse. The older generation may have blind faith in the ancient belief of pleasing the soul by keeping the corpse and lead to
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 low
donation
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 rate. What makes it worse is the measly awareness of donating organs from the younger generation. According to the Hospital Authority, only 4.3% of the enormous 7.5 million population has registered as
an
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organ
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donor
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. It is ashamed of a big city but has a handful of people willing to contribute their organs after
deaths
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. By adopting the presumed-consent scheme, the awaiting patients can transplant the damaged organs as fast as possible and it saves thousands of lives.
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, it can raise the attention of youngsters on related news and topics. Notwithstanding the launching, the government should learn from those countries which have adopted the
system
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 and try to give more details about the
system
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. Back to the
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, the government needs to educate and promote the ideas of
organ
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donation
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. The simplest way is they can spread the messages from holding different activities or street counters by collaborating with the district councillors, who are the easiest to approach with different ages. To conclude, it is important to adopt the opt-out
system
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 due to the low
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 rate.
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, the government should not launch it by heavy-handed tactics before the citizens understanding the aims of
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donation
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.

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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