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Some people say history is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that in todays world subjects such as Science and technology are more important than history

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In our today's globalising
world
,
Accept space
,
since education is deemed to be vitally important so as to create bright perspective, there is a role of every
subject
 to build the foundation of knowledge.It is thought that some people prefer
ti
in the direction of
to
the
 learn more
History
 than other subjects considering it is a vital
subject
 while
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
 believe that Science and Technology are more
crusial
of extreme importance; vital to the resolution of a crisis
crucial
 than it. As far as I am concerned, the latter idea is a better.As it is a controversial topic, both types of opinions will be explained in the following paragraphs. On the one hand,
although
History
 is essential to learn societies, different cultures,
evelution
Suggestion
the evolution
evolution
 of our
world
 and helpful to
people
Suggestion
person's
 image the picture of
whole
Suggestion
the whole world
world
, in the 21 century people have a tendency to learn more Science as well as Technology subjects because of various changes and development.
That is
 why, there is
a
Suggestion
an
 oppositional
opinions
Suggestion
opinion
 between them.
On the other hand
, some people suppose that
History
,
Accept space
,
which is boring and less effective, is not current education trying to learn subjects in order to create new technological innovations for future development.
However
,
History
subject
 can be
reason
Suggestion
reasoned
 as motivation to create news while it
ia
have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)
is
 claimed helpful
ti
in the direction of
to
 avoid mistakes,
such
 as harmful illnesses or protect people' life. To draw a conclusion, every
subject
 is crucial in the education system, and students able to acquire knowledge about them, but I think that people should
spere
refrain from harming
spare
 time to learn necessary subjects for themselves in the modern
world
.

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