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’’ Mothers play key roles in the upbringing of children, but in the recent times both parents are getting busy with professional life. Who in your opinion should take the responsibility of child care now?’’ Give your opinion in no less than 250 words.

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Since the dawn of civilization mothers
have been taking
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has been taking
has been taken
was taken
has taken
care
 of their son and daughter;
however
, they are becoming busier with their professional life like fathers due to the recent situation of
the busiest
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the busy
 world. Considering
this
 situation, I must say that parents both men and women should take
responsibility
 of nourishing their infants. Mothers, generally, are responsible to take
care
 of their
child
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children
.
Nevertheless
, the tradition is changing, where mothers have to pay attention about professional career and they play vital roles in the development of their society and country. From
this
perspective there
Accept comma addition
perspective, there
 is no point to bound mothers to restrict them only in
house hold
a social unit living together
household
 activities.
Consequently
, fathers should come forward to take
care
 of
child
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the child
children
a child
 along with mothers. Observing recent changing
trend
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trends
 of the world, where women are considered
crucial part
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a crucial part
 of
socio-economic
involving social as well as economic factors
socioeconomic
 development, men should let women do other activities outside of the home. So, men should
also
 take
responsibility
 of taking
care
 of infants. Needless to say that, if we think that there is no
responsibility
 of men in upbringing of children, it will not bring a good result for the society. Because, if men do not take
care
 their children, they will have less influence on their children to help them to lead a peaceful life as they have no contribution to take
care
 of their
child
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children
.
That is
 why, to influence children positively, men must have to have
great contribution
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a great contribution
great contributions
 in the upbringing of children. To put it briefly, taking
care
 of
children mothers
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the children's mothers
children's mothers
have
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has
major
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a major responsibility
major responsibilities
responsibility
.
However
, considering the recent change of the world women should not be restricted only in the upbringing of children. As men should have contribution to take
care
 of children so both should take the
responsibility
.

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