’’ Mothers play key roles in the upbringing of children, but in the recent times both parents are getting busy with professional life. Who in your opinion should take the responsibility of child care now?’’ Give your opinion in no less than 250 words.

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Since the dawn of civilization mothers
have been taking
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has been taking
has been taken
was taken
has taken
care
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of their son and daughter;
however
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, they are becoming busier with their professional life like fathers due to the recent situation of
the busiest
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the busy
world. Considering
this
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situation, I must say that parents both men and women should take
responsibility
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of nourishing their infants. Mothers, generally, are responsible to take
care
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of their
child
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children
.
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, the tradition is changing, where mothers have to pay attention about professional career and they play vital roles in the development of their society and country. From
this
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perspective there
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perspective, there
is no point to bound mothers to restrict them only in
house hold
a social unit living together
household
activities.
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, fathers should come forward to take
care
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of
child
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the child
children
a child
along with mothers. Observing recent changing
trend
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trends
of the world, where women are considered
crucial part
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a crucial part
of
socio-economic
involving social as well as economic factors
socioeconomic
development, men should let women do other activities outside of the home. So, men should
also
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take
responsibility
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of taking
care
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of infants. Needless to say that, if we think that there is no
responsibility
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of men in upbringing of children, it will not bring a good result for the society. Because, if men do not take
care
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their children, they will have less influence on their children to help them to lead a peaceful life as they have no contribution to take
care
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of their
child
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children
.
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why, to influence children positively, men must have to have
great contribution
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a great contribution
great contributions
in the upbringing of children. To put it briefly, taking
care
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of
children mothers
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the children's mothers
children's mothers
have
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has
major
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a major responsibility
major responsibilities
responsibility
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.
However
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, considering the recent change of the world women should not be restricted only in the upbringing of children. As men should have contribution to take
care
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of children so both should take the
responsibility
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.

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