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Some people think that the news media has become much more influential in people’s lives today and it is a negative development.   Do you agree or disagree?

#people #news #media #people’s #lives #development
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In compliance with the development of events and the emergence of most opportunities, the mastery of the huge power of the media over consumers is a negative development, according to some. I completely agree with
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 trend, because excessive and unnecessary interference has many bad sides.
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 reason is the effect on the psyche.
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, in traditional pool, the media express the
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 too sharply, which leads to the fact that people begin to panic or zombie. Even if substantial daily doses of (abound) awareness does not hurt, panic reflects a moral ideal of mankind.
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, the media every time notifies people of the constant growth of those infected with a real pandemic -
covid
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conventional picture) is a violation of the psyche of the age category, because most often no one guarantees that in front of the TV or the one who watches the news is an adult.
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, provided that a child reads or watches
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 will greatly affect the formation of a person in the future.
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, in some cases platform of social media will raise awareness, but there are news when people's brains stop thinking meaningfully
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 Another important reason is the concern about worthless
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, because with the advent of a pandemic,
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 in the media ceased to be filtered.
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 people look forward to tempting messages every time, most of the
information
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misspents
spend time badly or unwisely
misspent
 their time.
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, by adhering to the statistics of the
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 2 months, 70% of the media
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 that they print, broadcast and transmit is misinforming garbage.
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,
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 on programs / TV channels / the Internet viewed by thousands of people can harm or mislead a person.
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, individuals can make the situation in the country worse. To illustrate, many users, due to
pandemic
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the pandemic
, did not understand the precautions correctly and bought up all buckwheat, masks and toilet paper, creating panic, which leads to poor conditions in the country.
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, media
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 may be useless and its impact will lead to waste or civil unrest. In short, I completely agree with the opinion that the negative impact of the media on people is strong
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because exaggerate account of news can broke balance in a country.

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