Topic 3: the best way to resolve significant environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is true that humans are struggling to find solutions for environment-related issues.

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a number of

people

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believe that increasing

fuel

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prices is the most effective one, I completely disagree with that point of view. On the one hand, we have other options that prove to be more persuasive approaches.

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, since many alternative sources of energy emerged in recent years, we have many choices which are environmentally friendly to replace fossil

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fuel

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fuels

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, Tesla, the biggest electric vehicle company, shows the world that their cars are not only cleaner for the environment but

also

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more convenient for customers than

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conventional ones. That fascinating success of

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a young firm makes other automakers, which were founded for decades,

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realise that sustainable energy is truly the future of the automotive industry.

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, the advancement of technology nowadays allows us to optimise

fuel

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engine

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, and

this

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means that we can reduce car emissions but still retain the performance.

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, hybrid vehicles, which are more and more widely studied, can convert waste energy into electricity during

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operation, and

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can replace the main power when needed.

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, there are some reasons why imposing a higher tax on

fuel

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not only is an ineffective strategy but

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leads to consequences.

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this

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policy will

give

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a significant impact on poor

people

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low development

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countries, who mostly are farmers or fishermen. Spending too much on

fuel

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, they will use other methods which may harm the environment to increase

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revenue and compensate

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cost

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as using toxic chemical pesticides or overfishing.

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, the price is not the main reason for

people

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to cut down on emissions.

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, despite the high cost of

fuel

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, Vietnamese

people

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tend to choose personal vehicles rather than public

transportations

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transportation

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, which are widely recognised means to improve

urban

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the urban

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atmosphere effectively. In conclusion,

although

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some

people

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believe that making

fuel

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more expensive is the best way to tackle the environmental crisis, I would argue that we have better choices, which can overcome the side

effect

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effects

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such

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policy

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a policy

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Consider providing a clearer stance on your position in the introduction to enhance clarity.

Coherence and Cohesion

Make sure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence to guide the reader effectively.

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While your examples are relevant, try to incorporate more diverse examples to strengthen your argument.

Coherence and Cohesion

The essay contains a well-structured argument with clear points and a logical flow.

Task Achievement

You provided relevant examples that support your claims, demonstrating a good understanding of the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

348 words

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