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What are the advantages and disadvantages of studying online course?

#course
Internet
Suggestion
The internet
 has turned out to be approached to apply for educations, which has proved its effectiveness and convenience.
Besides
, I believe on-screen curriculums have
also
 met a lot of handicaps.
First
 to be said, by studying online, students are able to choose the environment to work: their bedroom, living room, desk, the coffee across the street,
…
Accept space
…
 Learning through the Internet
also
 gives learners more flexibility, they can work and fit their schedule. According to a survey conducted by Learning House has illustrated 44% of online students reported improvements in their employment standing,
for example
 by obtaining a full-time job within 12 months of graduation, and 45% reported a salary increase.
Next
, self-discipline and responsibilities is something students can inquire from online courses. It requires self-awareness and time managing skills which can bring into play in the future and obtain with flying colours.
Last
 but not least, on-screen curriculums provide
such
 a wide range of choices of subjects, learners can
base
Suggestion
based
 on their interest and career opportunities to elect what are suitable for them.
On the other hand
, online courses require
accessing
Suggestion
access
 to the Internet, which mean it is not a completely safe place. Information leaking, involve in inappropriate information
such
 as reactionary, hand down wrong ideas,… can occur through studying online.
Besides
, not every website on the Internet is safe enough
to access
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to, access
in
Suggestion
to
, hackers may cash in on the unsafe security for several purposes.
This
 can be illustrated to the considerable increase in communal crimes, hackers and the unrest of Internet security.
Next
,
users especially
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users, especially
 young age users can be distracted easily by the advertisement, films, musics, games, ... While having a class online, teachers or instructors cannot manage their students what are they doing because they now have several tricks to be cahoots with their teachers. In additions, the radiation from the screens may affect excessively to their eyes and cause several health problems
such
 as short-sighted eyes,
isomina
an inability to sleep; chronic sleeplessness
insomnia
,… In conclusion, online courses
has demonstrated
Suggestion
have demonstrated
 its
usefulness but
Accept comma addition
usefulness, but
also
 contain potential danger which require both students and instructors to equip enough knowledge and be self aware.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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