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In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

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In the techno - oriented era students have great chance
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to
study
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 in foreign
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 while in past days they only studied in their own nation even they have
university degree
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a university degree
university degrees
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 I personally believe that the advantages
study
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 in
outer
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 countries is more than disadvantages. To being with
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 students can get more job opportunities in foreign after their
study
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 because in abroad there are big chances of employment
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 after two or three year
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study they
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study, they
 can get the PR of that
country
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 which helps to grow their
good
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best
 future
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 they can
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 invite their family members to live with them
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Thus
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This
study
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 in abroad is very beneficial for students because
by
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of
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 they create more opportunities for their long term
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In addition
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 students can know about the other
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country culture
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country, culture
 and tradition
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 They can learn many new things and they can become more advance because in foreign countries the technology is very fast
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 Apart from it may be
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 beneficial for the
country
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economic
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economically
 development
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 Along with many advantages it
have
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has
also
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 some disadvantages like students are unaware
from
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of
 the other
country
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 environment due to
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 sometime they face lots of difficulties which may be negatively affected their
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
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 Like they can
disconnected
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disconnect
 to their goals
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 In conclusion
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 students get more benefits from
study
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 in abroad if they can aware all of the information related to
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
country
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 where they are going
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