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Title: More and more students are choosing to study at colleges and universities in a foreign country. Do the benefits of studying abroad outweigh the drawbacks

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It is not uncommon these days for most students to select to study at fore
ign college and
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a foreign college
foreign colleges
 educational institutions. In
this
 essay l wil
try
the capability of conscious choice and decision and intention
will
 to discuss both of the merits and downsides of the argument,
that is
 to say, of studying abroad. Those, who agree with the view that there are more advantages of studying at universities of a
f
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in
oreign
country
 than disadvantages, provide a variety of points in favour of their opinion.
First
 and foremost, many students travel abroad to study at a prestigious college or university. In my opinion,
as a result
, some of the students, who are keen on touring some cities, have the opportunity to get new and intriguing information about the place they visit.
Furthermore
, qualifications gained abroad can open doors to better job opportunities. Take someone as an example,
for instance
, one of my uncles studied abroad for three years. And he has been working at the international organization as one of the highly paid experts since he returned to his native
country
 leaving the foreign university.
Last
 but not least, living in a foreign
country
 can broaden students' horizons. As a consequence, they may educate a lot of pupils on t
he
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in
ir special field after they return. I am sure,
this
 is
also
 useful for some students who cannot go to foreign countries to study.
On the other hand
, one should not ignore some reasons against the benefits of studying abroad. One of the downsides is that the language barrier can cause difficulties.
For example
, they cannot understand something during their lesson or the conversation with any native citizen of that
country
.
Moreover
, students may have some issues with paperwork
such
 as visa applications.
Consequently
, they have to waste their much time and money to tackle the problems. Overall, studying abroad give
stu
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gives
dents more opportunities
such
 as travelling, better well-paid job and the expansion of students' horizons.
Therefore
, the advantages of studying at the world universities outweigh the disadvantages. ✍ by Marjona Aliyeva
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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