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It is believed that students at schools and universities can learn better via technology rather than with teachers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people are of the opinion that learning through technology at schools and higher educational settings can be more efficient, while many others suggest that absorbing knowledge with the help of teachers is the best method. In my opinion, technology-based learning has several advantages related to time management,
however traditional
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however, traditional
 way
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are
 more beneficial to overall progress of students. On the one hand, the reason we are surrounded by technology and its products in just about every aspect
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of
 our lives is that machines are more useful in terms of provision of flexibility.
In other words
, replacing humans in
favor
promote over another
favour
 of technological devices in teaching and education might result in faster learning. Students have a chance of determining how to use their time effectively.
This
 mode of education provides for
liberal environment
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the liberal environment
a liberal environment
 in which students are free to manage when to study through online courses and
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serving or intended to explain or make clear
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 videos. More, they can determine which subjects they will focus on and repeat issues which they have found hard and complicated.
On the other hand
, academics play a vital role in educating the youngsters. Face-to-face teaching encourages
interactive environment
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an interactive environment
 in which students can ask questions immediately when they do not understand.
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Therefore
, they can take the information given without having complexities in their minds.
This
 cultivates in complete understanding. In conclusion, despite computers are useful and giving flexible time management to the school-goings, teachers are better at preparing new generations for the future by presenting an active atmosphere in
classroom
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the classroom
.
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