These days, we are seeing an increasing amount of violence on television, and this is having a negative impact on children’s behaviour. Do you agree or disagree?

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Watching

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nowadays is becoming a part of people daily activities to spend our leisure time and gathering new information worldwide. On the other side, some people believe that seeing

television

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gives a negative effect to children's behaviour. While

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is understandable, I strongly believe that each opinion has a strong reason. Not only adult people, but

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children who watch

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. Some

television

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daily programs showing a violence on their

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program

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. Many people link violence on

television

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with the real world. Children who do not have a mind border yet usually copying behaviour they see on the screen.

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, in Indonesia, in these recent years children delinquency increased dramatically. They do crimes based on violence they saw on

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trend makes them become a criminal, some case makes someone lose their life.

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, some

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programs giving a negative impacts to a child's future.

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, we can

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get some benefits by watching

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. By seeing

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, children can gather information and make learning more fun. We can update our knowledge about global events. The evidence of

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case can be seen that nowadays, by watching the Discovery Channel or National Geographic, young people will get a new edification. Children will have an awareness about world wild and know about the new place without having to go there.

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has another function. For some children who does not have much time to play outside, seeing

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program

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is one of a best way to relax.

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, now on nearly all of

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station has a comedy

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program

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brings the best comedian, which

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decades, only can be seen in the circus, into our homes.

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program

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will entertain and refresh children mind after their gruelling day. To sum up, it is evident that seeing

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has advantages,

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it has

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given

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give negative effect. To reduce the negative impact for children, parents and the society should pay more attention to young kids and selected

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program

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that children watched.

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