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You should Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the 19th century. The map below shows the development of the village.

You should Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the 19th century. The map below shows the development of the village.
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The figure shows how the village
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Chorleywood
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 was developed between 1868 and 1994. As illustrated, there are four main periods. The first
period
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 lasted for 15 years and began in 1868. During that time, there has been just a very small group of people living along the main road near
Chorleywood
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 Park. In the
second
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period
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 starting from 1883 to 1922, more people started spreading around
Chorleywood
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 station
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twice the size of the population in the first
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. The population was even bigger in the
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period
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 which happened after that and continued until 1970.
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 of living around the station, they went to live along the railway opposite
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the side of
Chorleywood
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 Park.
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, between 1970 and 1994, the population had reached 10 times larger than it was in the first
period
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. During
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 24-year
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, there were a huge number of buildings located along the two sides of the motorway.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chorleywood, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Steadily
  • Pivotal events
  • Significant change
  • Transportation links
  • Commuter village
  • Residential areas
  • Commercial areas
  • Public facilities
  • Infrastructure
  • Environmental impact
  • Community life
  • Conservation efforts
  • Maintaining character
  • Vicinity
  • Unique aspects
  • Common challenges
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