At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the numbers of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

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a major proportion
the major proportion
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the country's population
country's population
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countries' population
population
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was
mainly young adults as
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comparison
compared
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To begin
with,the advantages of increased
Youth
population
can not be over estimated as the benefit outweigh the disadvantages,
firstly
the
youth
are the futures of tommorow,in
this
case when assessing the economic effects of the high
youth
population
it seems is very important factor in contributing to economic of the countries
for
example
most seniors are in their retirement age receiving income from the Government ,so for Government of each
country
to maintain constant pension payments
this
requre a lot of
youth
in workforce paying their taxes and
this
will inturn sustain each
country
economy. More
also
,
for
example
for
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like C
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Canada, which
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ewers
(comparative of 'few' used with count nouns) quantifier meaning a smaller number of
fewer
youth
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adults
and
that is
why c
anada
a nation in northern North America; the French were the first Europeans to settle in mainland Canada
Canada
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engages
in immigration in order to fill the port hole in
population
margins by allowing more
youth
to come to
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the country
and
this
tremendously increased their working
youth
number and improve the Canadian economic status. l
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ooking into the disadvantages more
Youth
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Firstly
the
youth
need to empower by
country
,
for
example
some
country
have free education up to high school while some
country
give access to loan for Tertiary education and these enable the
youth
to contribute positively to the
society
at long run and
also
there is a lot of jobs in the
society
for
youth
but
this
is different in each
country
for
example
in a
country
where job opportunities is less and
also
more illiterate
youth
there is a lot of crime because majority of the
youth
are not educated and
this
pose a threat to the of older people in the
society
,like stealing engage in frauds and all sort of criminals activities. l
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the high population
population
of
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country
and
also
sustained the financial benefits of the retired Senior in our
society
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