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All education (primary, secondary and further education) should be free to all people and paid and managed by the government. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Providing literacy to everybody free of cost has been the controversial matter for nation since decades.Many people argue
this
 notion as it would cause huge financial burdens on the state.
However
, as far as I am concerned, I completely agree with the above statement. There are numerous reasons for my perspective, among which, the preponderant is that learning is the right of everyone, and no one should lag behind because of not getting an opportunity to learn.
For example
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 it may possible, there are children in scarce areas who have inbuilt talent
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but they could not flourish due to lack of schooling.
Thus
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 if schooling is free of cost, especially in developing countries,
then
 no child would deprive from learning by the dint of poverty.
Additionally
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 giving necessary schooling for each and everyone will lead to a better nation as educated population maintain a more civilizes society as well as a skilled workforce to the industry; resultantly, proves to be an asset for the nation.
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 cost free education will certainly help the country, not only in social aspects but
also
 economically. Despite above benefits, a part of society has always opposed
this
 believe. They consider it as an unnecessary expenditure of state funds
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which ultimately an extra burden on taxpayers as it requires huge budgets for buildings, teachers and many other facilities. Apart from
this
, they believe that availability of study for everyone will lead to more literate people, and
hence
 there would be chances of more unemployment.In short, opponents have their own insecurities that is why they re not in favour of free schooling. In conclusion,
although
 some people disagree with the idea of free training, its advantages outweigh disadvantages. According to my perception, by the dint of the very few drawbacks, contribution of free culture towards state should not be overlooked.
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