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Some people argue that job satisfaction is more important than job security, while others believe that they cannot always expect job satisfaction, and a permanent job is more important. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is believed that satisfied the
job
 is more effective than the stable
work
, whereas others expect that it is more important in having a permanent
work
. In my point of view, both favourite and security
job
 has its own positive impacts.
This
 essay will be discussed about the statement. On the one hand, there are a several benefits of the
job
 satisfaction to the employee.
To begin
 with, they will have the ambition to achieve the best consequence in their favourite
job
, so they would do the
work
 more effectively and correctly.
Furthermore
, the employees will feel comfortable and convenient when they are able to
work
 in their dream environment, so they can do the
work
 in a productive ways. When they are productive, they might have a higher income and
also
 develop the company.
For example
, my sister used to have a stable
job
, but she found her interest is in other fields and now she is really successful in her
job
 satisfaction.
On the other hand
, due to the development of technology nowadays, the labour market is creased, so almost everyone wants to keep their present
job
then
 change it into the personal’s preferred
job
. At its benefit, the worker’s salary will be stable, which does not like the satisfied
job
 the employee’s income will be flexible on their working performance. Unfortunately, some people give up the stable
job
 to find their favourite career lead to the temporary unemployment, so it is a risky situation in modern life. To sum up,
although
 the
job
 satisfaction brings a huge of benefits to the employees, having a stable
work
 in modern century will help the worker to have a stable income.

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