Some Parents think that watching television and playing computer video games is beneficial for children development some say it has a negative impact on children development.Give opinions on both the ideas with e.g.

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more than is needed, desired, or required
extra
-curricular activities like watching television and playing games, either indoor or outdoor games, are necessary for a
child
mental and physical build up. It is a controversial topic
,
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,
as some people appreciate it while some are
aginst
in contact with
against
it. At early ages
;
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;
an age of
intellecutal
of or associated with or requiring the use of the mind
intellectual
and mental growth, children can learn basic skills easily
.
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.
So at
this
age, they should have facilities of playing games and learn through different television programs.
This
will not only builds the skills of a
child
, but can make
one
active and energetic. Today, we are living in a materialistic world and people with different skills are wanted at any field.
As
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As, for
for instance
, if a
child
learn
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learns
to play tennis at early ages
,
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,
one
develop
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develops
so fine skills in that game as these are
on
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in
demand now and appreciates by people.
Infact
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In fact
, there are chances to play at international level as a champion.
Moreover
, if children learn some basic skills at
early
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earlier
ages,
then
they are considered as
multitalented
and
such
kind of people are really
on
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in
demand in
near future
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the near future
when they will become professionals.
On the contrary
, there are many hazards if children are allowed to watch television or remain indulged in playing video games.
Firstly
, by looking
contiously
with awareness
consciously
at
screen
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the screen
will have negative effects on their eyesights, and
infact
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in fact
at early ages it will affect mental
actvity
any specific behavior
activity
badly.
Secondaly
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Secondly
, a
child
may
lost
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lose
interest in studies and become irritable, as
one
wants to remain in his/her imaginative
games
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game
world. These negative impressions leads to immoral behaviour of a
child
.As quoted, if a
child
continously play
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continuously plays
continuously play
continually play
a game, and no
one
is paying attention
toward
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to
that
child
, a sense of being neglected will have its own effects on that apart from education and behaviours are suffering from it. In conclusion,
although
games are important for children, but parents should have
hold
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held
on all
activites
any specific behavior
activities
of a
child
and they are
allowes
make it possible through a specific action or lack of action for something to happen
allowed
to play games for
few hours
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a few hours
, as time
managent
the act of managing something
management
is
importnat
of great significance or value
important
there
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they're
to control a
child
while nurturing him or her.

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