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What are some of the reasons for women to get married before graduation and provide their effects ?

#women #graduation #effects
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 of the most conspicuous trends of today’s world is a colossal upsurge in
marriage
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 of undergraduate women. There is a widespread worry that
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 will only lead to a myriad of concerns in the society. In my opinion,
marriage
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 of undergraduate women has more negative than positive impacts in the society. On
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 hand, critics may point out that
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 of the most significant effects of
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 of undergraduate women is
timely settlement
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a timely settlement
 of
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the family
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women unlike
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women, unlike
 in the past are now living a more happy married life.
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, there are a number of arguments in
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 of my stance. The most preponderant
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 is that
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 of undergraduate women has many benefits for the community in various ways.
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, they can learn more effectively because their can freely focus on study
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 of other responsibilities. According to, "Times
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magazine, December
 2017 edition", the proportion of effective learning has increased from 30 percent’s to 70
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percent
 today.
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, a large portion of the women cannot complete their graduation because of
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 responsibilities like giving birth to babies, raising children and financial issues.
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, in my opinion, the government of Australia is taking a great initiative in educating its welfare organizations on the impact of
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 of undergraduate women. Welfare organizations are being encouraged to spend a significant portion of their time in supporting women to complete their graduation before getting married. In view of the arguments outlined above,
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 can conclude that despite having some effects, the causes of
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 of undergraduate women in the society are indeed too dire to ignore.
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