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The two maps show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.

The two maps show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.
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The maps indicate the
road
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 facilities to a city hospital over 3 years from 2007
till in
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to
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 2010.
Overall
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,
existing
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the existing
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 parking opportunity has been noticeably extended over
this
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 period. One change that stands out is that
,
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apply
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 there has been a significant development. In 2007, there were bus stops on both sides of
the
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apply
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Hhospital
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Hospital
Road
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 and car parking
were
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was
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 in
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the usage
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usage
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use
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 of staff and the public in the east.
However
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, for accessing the movement of cars and buses, on the west part of the
road
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, the area has been separated as a bus station and
also
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redeveloping
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redeveloped
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 car parking constructed to the
eas
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east
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 of a city hospital for the public. The car parking of staff
stand
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 still as it did in 2007 . Another remarkable thing is that providing
road
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 access has been possible through roundabouts. The crossing of the three main ways has been
modernisedmodernized
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modernised modernized
 and involved in the intercourtintercourse of patients by means of two roundabouts which
also
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has
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apply
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connected
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 to
bus
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the bus
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 station.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "stands" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • dual carriageway
  • roundabout
  • traffic flow
  • multi-story car park
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian provisions
  • footpaths
  • traffic signals
  • construction phase
  • ambulances
  • carriageway expansion
  • traffic congestion
  • pedestrian crossings
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure development
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