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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table illustrates the proportion of monthly household income five European countries spend on food and drink, housing, clothing and entertainment. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table illustrates the proportion of monthly household income five European countries spend on food and drink, housing, clothing and entertainment. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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Proportion
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The proportion
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 of household
income
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five
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in five
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 European
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 spend on
food
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 and
drink
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, housing, clothing and entertainment. The table shows the amount of household
income
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 that
five
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countries
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 in Europe spend per month on four items.
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, it is evident that all
five
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countries
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 spend the majority of their
income
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 on
food
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 and
drink
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 and housing, but much less on clothing and entertainment. Housing is the largest expenditure item for France, Germany and the UK, with all of them spending around
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 of their
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, at 30%, 33% and 37%, respectively.
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, they spend around a quarter on
food
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 and
drink
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.
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,
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 pattern is reversed for Turkey and Spain, who spend around a fifth of their
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 on housing, but approximately
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 on
food
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 and
drink
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. All
five
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countries
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 spend much less on the remaining two items. For clothing, France and Spain spend the least, at less than 10%,
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 the other three
countries
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 spend around the same amount, ranging between 11% and 15%. At 19%, Germany spends the most on entertainment,
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 UK and Turkey spend approximately half
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 amount, with France and
Spain's
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Spain
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 spending between those other three nations.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income, five, countries, food, drink with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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