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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table illustrates the proportion of the monthly household income of five European countries spend on food and drink, housing, clothing, and entertainment Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table illustrates the proportion of the monthly household income of five European countries spend on food and drink, housing, clothing, and entertainment Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The table shows the share of household
income
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 that the five European
countries
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 spend on
food
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 and drink, housing, clothing and entertainment. As you can see in the table, all 5
countries
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 spend most of their household
income
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 on
food
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 and drinks and housing.
France
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,
Germany
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 and the United Kingdom are in the lead in
terms
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 of housing.
In particular
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: UK- 37%,
Germany
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 - 33%,
France
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 - 31%.
Turkey
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 and
Spain
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,
on the other hand
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, spend most of their
income
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 on
food
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 and drink,
Turkey
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 – 36%,
Spain
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 – 31%. “51” In
terms
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 of clothing, it is low in all 5
countries
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. Of these
countries
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,
Germany
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 leads by 15%.
According to
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this
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 indicator,
France
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 and
Spain
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 are in the
last
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 place,
France
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 – 7% and
Spain
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 – 8%. Respectively,
Turkey
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 and the United Kingdom have 12 and 11 percent . “80” In
terms
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 of entertainment,
Germany
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 is in the lead, ie 19%. And Great Britain and
Turkey
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 are almost half of
this
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 figure,
in particular
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: Great Britain – 11%,
Turkey
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 – 10%.
Spain
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 is in
second
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 place with 15%, and
France
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 is in
third
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 place with 13%. What do we understand from
this
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 table? In conclusion,
Turkey
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 and
Spain
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 are the leaders in
food
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 and drinks. The UK,
Germany
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 and
France
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 are the leaders in housing
income
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 in five European
countries
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. “26” In
terms
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 of clothing and entertainment,
Germany
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 is at the forefront.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in particular".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income, countries, food, france, germany, terms, turkey, spain with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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