Many people believe that individuals are responsible for their own happiness, while others think happiness is dependent on other external factors. Discuss both views and include your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and examples from your experience.

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Happiness is
state
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a state
the state
of mind that many masses can easily get but for many others it would be different
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Some people opine that a
person
is responsible for their own happiness while
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
thinks that the
outer
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
factors creates happiness
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however
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belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
believes
believed
that the internal as well as external factors are responsible for happiness
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I intend to delve some reasons for it. To initiate with, every
person
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has
their own view to see things
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ideas and perception
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in
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In
holy book
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the holy book
of Hindus
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The Bhagwagita
also
had explained through "
tunde
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Tunde
tunde
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Tunde
Mani
bhinnaha
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person
have different mind
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A good
person
is who adopt changes easily and move on from
past
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the past
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For example
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in my
neighborhood
a surrounding or nearby region
neighbourhood
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the
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Brazilian statesman who ruled Brazil as a virtual dictator (1883-1954)
Vargas
family has been living since 2000 but
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definite article
the
breadwinner of his family died due to
dieases
an impairment of health or a condition of abnormal functioning
diseases
disease
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old
person
who had already retired 2 years ago, now
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fully apprehended as to purport or meaning or explanation
understood
that he needed to go
for
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to
work to feed
family
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the family
a family
families
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They adopted Change. On opposite view
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the external factors like as finance
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health
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environment and so on
also
affect
alot
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a lot
. Many families
does not have
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do not have
enough money to survive and provide basic necessities
although
they goes for work
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Some masses have health problem and
suffed
undergo or be subjected to
suffer
from decease. The recent Corona epidemic is
good example
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a good example
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At that
time so
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time, so
many families
lossed
no longer in your possession or control; unable to be found or recovered
lost
their family members
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friends
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brothers
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sisters and
also
childs but
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children, but
children but
at
last
all come up and deed new start of life
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The
environment
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environmental
factor is Paramount become from it within a
second
life has been changed
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For example
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in
earthquake
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an earthquake
the earthquake
of 2011
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homes
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properties were lost by everyone
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It took nearly one or two minutes to destroy the all money which
were earned
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was earned
whole life
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Everywhere only seen is knocked houses and dead bodies
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To sum up
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it has been said that with time passes
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every wound of the body will recover but the condition is solely positive attitude.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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