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the line chart shows the results of survey giving the reasons why people moved to the capital city of a particular country. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

the line chart shows the results of survey giving the reasons why people moved to the capital city of a particular country. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
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The line chart represents why
people
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 moved from
hometown
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their hometown
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 to the enormous
city
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.
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, considering four reasons during the
15 year
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15-year
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 period between 2000 and 2015.
According to
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 the line chart, the main reason was family or friends. In 2000, 60000
people
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 moved from their hometown to the capital
city
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. After 10 years, over 90000
people
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 preferred to change their hometown. But in 2015, it decreased and nearly under 90000
people
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. The
second
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 reason was the study. It was increased significantly by some fractions.
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, in 2000, just 25000
people
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 moved to the capital
city
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 but in 2015 it was nearly 90000
people
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. More
people
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 attended education in 15 year period. In comparison, employment and adventure were not very important
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 as other reasons.
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, both had the same number of
people
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 at the start of the period and it was nearly 1000
people
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. Both categories were increased,
employment
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with employment
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 going up by a large number of
people
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 and it was over 2000 in 2015. But just 15000
people
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 moved to the capital
city
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 in 2015 for adventure.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, city with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • line chart
  • survey
  • trend
  • increase/decrease
  • reasons
  • move/migration
  • capital city
  • fluctuations
  • significant spike/drop
  • comparison
  • predict
  • highlight
  • over time
  • period
  • development
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